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Wednesday, April 5, 2017

REACHING them to TEACH them!

April 2005 | Volume 62 | Number 7 
The Adolescent Learner Pages 8-15

Reach Them to Teach Them

Carol Ann Tomlinson and Kristina Doubet
Four high school teachers show that teaching adolescents is about relevance and challenge, affection and respect.
Two observations from teachers of adolescents are so prevalent these days that they sound like theme music. The more recurrent refrain says that there's no time for covering anything in high school classes other than curriculum or standards: There's no time for discussion, for student interests, for products beyond mandatory quizzes and tests, or for activities. Teachers are under relentless pressure to prepare students for high-stakes tests and for advanced placement or International Baccalaureate exams. The amount of material to cover simply exceeds the time available for covering it.
The second refrain has to do with the impracticality—if not impossibility—of really knowing one's students in a high school setting. There are too many of them, and they are indifferent—or ill-behaved. Combined with the avalanche of pressure for high test scores, these factors make it unfeasible for teachers to know their students more than superficially.
Snapshots of four high school classrooms challenge these two pervasive beliefs. We profile four teachers who connect with their students and who persevere in making learning a process that engages the minds and imaginations of the adolescents they teach. These teachers' professional work centers on knowing their students well enough to make learning interesting and on knowing their content well enough to shape it to their students' needs. These snapshots serve as an antidote to the very real pressures that can make us forget what lies at the core of transformational high school classrooms.

Katie Carson's Classroom: A Labor of Love

Katie Carson, a fifth-year teacher at Fauquier High School in Warrenton, Virginia, teaches English to 9th and 11th graders. She is a young teacher who spends some of her free time acting in and directing a comedy improvisation troupe in Washington, D.C. But teaching is her labor of love.
With the exception of a few overachievers in each class, says Carson, kids in high school “have zero desire to learn more about grammar, literature, and punctuation.” The magic of early experiences with reading and writing is gone. “So unless I create a class in which they discover one another's gifts and challenge one another, or unless they have a relationship with me,” she adds, “students have no desire to learn those things.”

Getting to Know One Another

Carson creates an environment in which students learn about one another and get to know their peers' strengths. She places students in groups in which they'll work for a quarter of the year. Once a week, on a randomly selected day, she gives the groups five-minute challenges, such as building the tallest tower in the class out of bits of paper and paper clips. You can hear students saying among themselves, “We need Steven for this job. He's the man!” This kind of focus is particularly important for students who are not initially seen as academic contributors.
The room is set up to welcome students, who can sit in armchairs, on a couch, or at tables. Carson also studies learning preferences and gives students opportunities to learn in ways that meet their various needs. “It's part of showing respect,” she says.
Attendance-taking begins with an “attendance question” as soon as the bell rings. As Carson calls their names, students respond to the day's question, providing a brief justification for their responses.
“OK, people, this is a big one today. Definitive answer. Coke or Pepsi?” On another day, she begins, “OK, folks, you've just been given a sampler box of Russell Stover candy, but the map is missing. You bite into a piece and much to your dismay, find you've chosen a _________.” Students answer by filling in the blank. Before long, students bring her slips of paper, whispering, “Here's an attendance question. It's really good!”

Sharing Stories

Carson encourages students to tell their own stories. “I'll even delay a test for a few minutes for a good story,” she says, “but it has to be a good one.” On the first day of class, she puts on the board a story arc, which contains seven numbered lines:
  1. Once upon a time . . .
  2. And every day . . .
  3. Until one day . . .
  4. And then . . .
  5. And then . . .
  6. Until finally . . .
  7. And ever since . . .
This is her way of teaching students about exposition, rising action, conflict, climax, and denouement. Teacher and students use the academic words in their conversations about stories, but the story arc serves as a barometer for assessing the stories that they share with one another. “You all have experiences that make good stories,” she reminds the students. “But it's all in how you tell them.”

Mastering the Content

Carson embeds the required content standards in her instruction, but the students feel that she's teaching them, not just “covering material.” In a recent Utopia project, nearly all her juniors said that they would do away with state standards if they could. “What's the point?” they asked, and they lamented the number of times their teachers say, “Now you'll need to remember this because it's on the standards test.”
Carson reminded those juniors that this was, in fact, a standards test year and that in three weeks, they would be taking the standards test in her class. “Yeah, but you don't bring it up all the time,” they responded. “You prepare us without teaching to the test.”
This is evident in a unit on 19th century American poetry. As the students compare various poems with artwork and photographs, Carson presents a quotation from a British author indicating that Americans have no literature. The students argue heatedly against the author's sentiment, using works that they have read as evidence to the contrary, and they ask whether they'll be able to “critique more artwork” after lunch.

Making Writing Relevant

When her class discusses a golden age of literature, Carson asks students to describe golden ages in their own lives and uses their descriptors as a segue into a serious discussion of literature. She notes,
My job is to make sure the kids know that I care, that I appreciate their sharing the truth about their lives, and that I value their opinions. When we have that personal trust, it's not so horrifying for them to write and turn that writing in to me.
Too often, she says, writing in high school is an exercise of turning in a paper to get it back covered with red marks. We forget, she suggests, how important it is for students to know that they have stories to tell and that those stories are full of discoveries about human nature.
Ned, for example, was a low-achieving student who did not—would not—write. Then he made the junior varsity football team. Carson told him that she was impressed because she'd never understood football. “Gosh,” he said, “you must be dumb.” For the rest of the year, he wrote about football in his journal, and she wrote back about football. In passing, she would mention in class that she had watched part of a game on TV or at school. “I understood why the flag was thrown. Thanks so much, Ned!” His stories had helped someone—and he was proud.

George Murphy's Classroom: It's All About Inquiry

As students enter George Murphy's 10th grade biology class, he chats with them individually about their reading and experiments. Murphy is science department chair at Fauquier High School in Warrenton, Virginia, and has taught for 24 years. When class begins, he proclaims, “Welcome to your favorite class of the day!” Students grin as he launches into the daily agenda posted on the board. There's a sense of urgency and excitement about the class: Important work is waiting, and there's no time to waste.

Demonstrating Understanding

The current science unit centers on energy and respiration. Murphy has embedded the key understandings in an exploration of diet and energy. He begins the unit with an interactive demonstration that introduces the key concepts of energy, action, and reaction. Students observe a new piece of equipment—an empty fermentation apparatus—and they hypothesize about its possible use. Their ideas initiate a demonstration of a basic working fermentation setup. Once students are clear about what is required for fermentation, they launch into an inquiry process to determine what caused the reaction they witnessed in the demonstration. Murphy carefully guides the process to be sure that students “get it” before they design their own experiments, in which they will pose and test a hypothesis about the nature of energy. Murphy's students demonstrate their understandings about energy both by completing a lab report and by creating a product that they choose from a list of teacher-provided and student-designed options.
Students select one of three tasks to continue learning about energy: Some students finish their experiments; some work with a study guide on the topic; and others work on laptops to complete a diet planner, an exercise that helps them analyze energy consumed and energy expended in their own lives.
There is no class textbook. Instead, Murphy guides students in finding authentic and reputable information sources, in print or on the Web.

Making It Relevant

Inquiry is at the root of Murphy's instruction. “I think everything in biology should be relevant to what students experience in their own lives,” he says. “It's the study of life, so a student should be able to connect biology with everything we do.”
He tells his students that if they can't see how a given topic connects to their lives, they probably shouldn't be studying it—either because it's not biology or because he hasn't clearly communicated the essence of the topic. He realizes that he must sometimes reteach material in new ways to help students find that connection. “We can talk about the ATP cycle, photosynthesis, and respiration, but that doesn't grab kids,” Murphy says. What does rouse their curiosity is analyzing the foods they're eating and burning and figuring out the caloric content.
Murphy teaches his students on a half-year block schedule. That constricts the time he has to get to know them, so he makes his curriculum and instruction compelling from the start.
He explains,
It's not the standards that will make school relevant and vital for students. I want to get them interested in what they're doing. I'm not up front to dance for them. I want to present the students with a challenge, see them rise to the challenge, see them want to learn. I want to dare them to have a good time with science.

Probing Student Thinking

Murphy moves among the students as they work with absorption on their tasks. Two girls who are using computers and the Body Mass Index (BMI) instrument to work on their diet profiles commiserate with him about their results, declaring that switching from whole to low-fat milk is doable but that giving up cookies in exchange for fruit is asking too much. A sturdy football player tells Murphy, “That's two pieces of bad news today. I have to lower my carbs—and I love carbs. I also have to lower my fat, and that stinks.” Another boy is searching on the Internet for a formula that he believes could call into question the figure generated by the BMI device. Two girls discuss the feasibility of “fooling” the instrument by combining their weights.
Two boys in the design phase of their experiment explain their hypothesis and how they arrived at it and then return to a discussion about what amount of glucose and water will work best in their experiment. A boy working with the study guide talks with Murphy about his topic, his research, and the Internet itself.
That Murphy engages both the interest and trust of his students is evident in the purposefulness of the classroom, in the respectful exchanges between Murphy and his students, and in the spirit of cooperation among the students themselves. As the students learn about biology, they discover its capacity to reveal life and to help them develop as thinkers. His instruction has nothing to do with coverage—it's about inquiry and community.

Chad Prather's Classroom: Making Connections

Chad Prather is a second-year teacher who teaches 9th graders world geography and world history at Charlottesville High School in Charlottesville, Virginia. Most of his world geography students read well below grade level, and they have little motivation to learn. Says Prather,
These students haven't been celebrated throughout their education. They've gotten used to tracking and very used to worksheets. When teachers give them something challenging, the students rebel because they're so used to worksheets that [the new assignment] just seems too hard.
Prather finds this situation tragic and is determined to show the students their untapped potential.
He's discovered that success lies in making two kinds of connections: connecting students with important ideas and establishing his own connection with students as individuals.

Connecting With Ideas

Prather organizes curriculum around key concepts rather than memorization of facts. Too much of what goes on in school, he believes, is focused on knowledge rather than on understanding. Knowledge, he says, may get students to answer “who” and “what” questions on a state test, but it falls short of helping them answer the more meaningful “how” and “why” questions. He adds,
Teachers have given these kids worksheets over the years in the hope that the worksheets would pound knowledge into their heads, that repetition would create memory. It doesn't. No one expects these students to understand. I tell them that I won't give them what they're used to. They need to step up to the challenge of understanding. Then the knowledge will take care of itself.
Prather's students work with units that raise important ideas in geography. The unit on space and interaction, for example, probes how humans adapt to and alter the environments in which they live. He explains,
When I prepare a lesson, I try to imagine myself as one of my students, and I ask myself—as though I were that student—Is this an engaging use of my time? Then I ask myself—as the teacher now—Is this an effective way of demonstrating meaning?

Connecting With Students

Prather says that connecting with his students is even more important than his sustained work to connect his students with the curriculum. “I had the idea early on,” he says, “that if I were assertive and hard-core with the rules, then the students would work hard for me.” That's not proven to be the case. What does work is connecting with students. Not only does it more successfully get them to work, but it also encourages them to accept living within the classroom rules. “The curriculum that I write has to come from a place that the kids are comfortable with,” says Prather. “And that obviously starts with the teacher-student relationship.”
The world geography class begins with a review that prepares students for a brief Jeopardy-like game. “I don't hear all of you reviewing,” prompts Prather, “and that gives me great displeasure. My heart is breaking as though it were the Earth's crust during plate tectonics.” Students grin and begin reviewing individually, in pairs, or in small groups. In the 10-minute Jeopardy game that follows, excitement builds to a pinnacle when an unlikely student selects and correctly answers a 1,000-point question. The class erupts in whoops of joy and praise.
Prather quickly transitions to a slide presentation designed to give his students images of the Earth's power. He understands that the process of a hurricane forming over an ocean means little to his students because most have never seen the ocean. He gives them cues about what matters most for them to understand, and he emphasizes the relationships, causes, and effects among the ideas depicted in the images.
Students move next to their “Thug Nasty Big Eartha” projects. For the unit's final product, students are asked to assume the role of lead producer of a new CD and select a project from a number of options that demonstrate that the Earth is a “thug nasty” place. Some students choose to write the lyrics for the hit single, “Big Eartha's House”; others may choose to design the CD cover. All product options focus on the Earth's power. “It's hard-core,” says Prather. “It doesn't back down.” Students look at ways in which the Earth exerts its supremacy, especially in terms of extreme weather and climatic forces. Students use teacher-provided grids to take notes on “molten hot performers,” such as Twisted Sister (tornado), Dry Bones (drought), and Grand Rapid (flood). Each product choice has a checklist for success, and all choices focus on the important information and ideas from the unit. Product options address varied student interests and learning modes.
In class, students work on their products as their teacher walks among them, coaching them. Because many of Prather's students have difficulty completing schoolwork at home, he and some colleagues provide a place in school in the afternoons for the many students who need time, space, and support for their work.
Prather knows he has much to learn about his students and about how best to connect them with ideas that they thought were out of their reach, but his students send him signals that he's working in the right direction: They talk with him about issues related to race and school, write him thank-you notes, and come by his classroom to share their successes.

Lori Mack's Classroom: Making All Students Count

Lori Mack, a veteran teacher with 18 years of experience, teaches 12th graders human anatomy and physiology at Charlottesville High School in Charlottesville, Virginia. Her culturally diverse seniors have varying reasons for taking the class but, according to Mack, share a lack of science background and skills.

Affection and Respect

As students filter into class, Mack chats with them about their day in an easy but businesslike way. “Are you ready?” she asks the students, with a hint of fun in her eyes as she finishes taking attendance.
“Ready,” they respond with certainty—all but one of them. Mack addresses her: “I know you're tired, but try to hang with me, will you?”
“I will, Ms. Mack, I'm listening,” the student responds earnestly.
The teacher nods and explains to the students that her plans for the day have changed. Their previous day's work indicates a need to revisit some of the unit's key concepts. They'll watch a brief film to help them think about the concepts in a different way and then work in groups to create a skit that demonstrates the concepts in action. The students are clearly interested.
“Guess what we'll be talking about in the video and skits,” the teacher prompts enthusiastically.
“Diffusion?” offers one student.
“Yes, diffusion!” Mack exclaims with relish.
“Osmosis?” suggests another.
“Osmosis!” she affirms with an almost religious fervor—arms flung in the air, face turned upward.
Students grin and keep guessing. “Homeostasis?”
“Yes! Homeostasis! It's a beautiful thing!” Mack exclaims.
As students interact with her, she circulates around the room, patting one student on the back, encouraging others, and never missing a beat with the discussion. “I'm a person to my students,” says Mack. “Making myself personable allows them to be a person back. There has to be an exchange of personhood.”
“The video,” she continues in a hushed voice, “is called The Magic of Cells!”
Mack prompts students to look for the important things as they watch the video. “Don't write down stupid little facts. Rise above it!” Throughout the film, she coaches students on their note-taking skills. “Don't get so caught up in writing that you miss the cool stuff. You need to see what it means!” Then, “You can do this! You can do this!” She draws students' attention to a demonstration on the video. “See, this is what semipermeable looks like. Do you understand better now?” She sighs with love every time homeostasis is mentioned. The students chuckle but never stop paying attention to the film.
As the film ends, the teacher gives her students a “two and two”—two minutes to check the accuracy of their notes against the notes of two other students. As they do this, she again walks among them. Her language is endearing. “You gotta get with it,” she says playfully to a student who has forgotten something. “Think you can hang?” she asks another. Her affection for the students is returned to her in kind. She also shows respect, persistently expecting—and demanding—high-quality work.
Mack then divides the students into teams and writes the names of the members of each team on the board. She deliberates aloud about who should be in which group. In truth, she has already developed the teams as part of her planning, but she has found that when the students hear her musing about her decisions, they understand her reasoning and don't question the composition of the groups. This process encourages their trust in her. Also, she says, it gives them time to adjust to working with whoever is on their team, removing the element of surprise and the balking that can follow.

A Community of Learners

The students are absolutely “into” their group work. They exchange ideas, revise those ideas, and build on one another's thoughts with ease. Comments indicating serious thought are evident around the room: “So, how are we going to demonstrate this part of the process?” “Am I supposed to move in and out constantly, or does something trigger my movement?” “Oh, so that's when we'll flip our signs to become the vacuoles!” “No, look at page 417. That's not what it says.”
Students rehearse their presentations and revise them as the teacher probes and sharpens their thinking. One group has their demonstration as finely choreographed as a dance and asks, “Ms. Mack, can we present today?” Mack tells them that presentations will begin during the following day's class. Satisfied, one student in the group replies, “OK, then we'll practice again.”
As announcements signal the end of the period, Mack reminds her students to clean up because it's not her job to do so. She uses a chance exchange to explain the difference between may and can. When one student becomes a bit loud, she holds up a ruler and says, “Let me measure how much you're ticking me off right now.” He smiles and settles down.
As the bell rings, the teacher stands in the doorway and makes a personal comment to each student. Some comments are playful and some are serious, but it's evident that each student appreciates the connection.
“My forte, my passion, my love is creating a learning environment in which everybody feels safe, able to succeed, and important,” says Mack. “In this class, nobody gets to be invisible.”

Lessons Taught and Learned

In a time when it's easy to reduce curriculum to coverage and to see students simply as takers of tests, these four teachers remember the important lessons about teaching and learning for adolescents. It's difficult for us as teachers to engage adolescents with a curriculum that has little impact on their lives. It's difficult to make curriculum relevant to lives that we don't understand.
“It's the best job in the world. Of course, it frustrates me to no end,” says Mack. “I scream and rant and rave. I get exhausted. But what an incredible ride, to be able to hang out with these kids, to be able to watch the transformation.”
And transformation is really what teaching is all about.
Carol Ann Tomlinson has 34 years of teaching experience and is currently Professor of Educational Leadership, Foundations, and Policy at the University of Virginia in Charlottesville, Virginia; cat3y@virginia.eduKristina Doubet has taught for 10 years and is currently a doctoral student in Curriculum and Instruction at the University of Virginia; doubet@virginia.edu.

Student Feedback from Priority Learners

Hub 2 - Priority Boy Writers


Eli 
Oscar
Liam
Grayson
Sean
Jake
Connor
Hamiora
Scott
Carter



Best Day ever.... reflection Time!


We still have a way to go BUT we are seeing a huge increase in motivation to write and self-belief for our reluctant writers.  My Term 1 goal was to increase engagement in Writing so there was a deliberate decision to focus on Night Zookeeper this term.  We worked hard on developing the culture of effective feedback and peer feedback.  

Class culture has also been a massive focus and Hub 2 is FIZZING! 

Tuesday, April 4, 2017

Show me, Don't tell me....

Found this resource and I think this will make a huge difference to the children's deeper features in Writing.  I liked the explanation and simplicity of it.  SHOW me don't TELL me!  We will get the class to co-construct their own examples for their exemplars....


Thursday, March 30, 2017

Boys like Experiences (according to the research).... So we raced Snails

A Language experience and the writing task was to create a newspaper article about the races OR to write a letter to Hub 1 and Room 5 challenging them to a Snail Off OR to write a recount about the experience.



















Wednesday, March 29, 2017

Hooks....

Question
When writing a question, try to create a picture in the reader’s mind. Use the words who, what, when, where, why, is, how, or are at the beginning of the sentence.

Quote

When writing a quote, it can be a direct quotation from a book, TV show, movie, or a famous person.

Onomatopoeia
Onomatopoeia is a word that makes sounds. Those can be animal sounds, car sounds, or any other sound. Examples include: Bang! Woof! or Cock-a-doodle-doo!

Poem
Use a poem from a famous author, or make up your own. 

Song
Use a line or two from your favorite song on the radio. Make sure you relate it to your essay.

Interjection
Interjections express emotions. Examples are Aha!, Stop!, Ugh!, Help!, Well!, YOW!, Brrrr!, Yummy!

Startling Statistic

Statistics show relationships with numbers. Find a surprising statistic involving your topic.

Dialogue

Dialogue features two or more people talking.

Here is an example of 8 different hooks which could be used for writing an expository essay about my favorite television show, Spongebob Squarepants:
QUESTION
• Where in the Pacific Ocean can you find a delicious Krabby Patty to eat, live in a pineapple, and drive in an underwater boat? Bikini Bottom, of course!

QUOTE
• "Do you smell that? That smell--It's the smell of a smelly smell that smells smelly," stated Spongebob from the show Spongebob Squarepants. 

ONOMATOPOEIA
• "Meooowww!" said Gary, Spongebob's pet snail. 

POEM
• Roses are red, violets are blue. I love Spongebob Squarepants, do you? 

SONG
• "Are ya ready kids? Aye, aye, Captain. I can't hear you! Aye, aye Captain. Ohhhh!" My favorite TV show started to play on Nickelodeon.

INTERJECTION
• "Noooo!" Don't touch the TV, I am watching my favorite show, Spongebob Squarepants. 

STARTLING STATISTIC
• Over 1 million adults and children worldwide tune in to watch the TV show, Spongebob Squarepants on a weekly basis 

DIALOGUE
• "There's nothing wrong with getting kissys from your grandmother," said Spongebob. "No, especially if you're a big baby who wears diapers!" responded Fish. 

Examples of Best Practices

To Do:

Need to create a resource that boys can go to SEE examples of ....Onomatopeia in a sentence or Similies in stories or rich use of adjectives etc.

Examples, Examples Examples - to model, model, model!

Language features and their effects
Use this checklist:
·       to understand the ways in which writers gain impact in their writing
·       to use various features in your own writing (creative and transactional, as well as for your oral presentations) in order to craft your writing and gain impact
·       to help you achieve unit standards which require you to explore language and think critically about poetic / transactional  / oral texts

Language feature
Definition or explanation
Example
General effect
(you must decide on the specific effect relative to the text)
Rhyme
The ends of words have the same sound.  Usually at the ends of lines in poetry, but may be internal (within a line).
That second day they hunted me
From hill to plain, from shore to sea.
Then Billy who was silly
Almost every other day…
Makes the text memorable and can make poems amusing.  Can tie together the middle and end of verses.
Rhythm
A regular pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables.
I went to town to buy a phone.
On the road there’s a girl with a bike.
Makes the text as a whole more memorable and makes it flow better.

Alliteration
Repetition of the same consonant sound at the beginning of words – usually close in succession.
Having heard the song, he sang it softly.
There came a ghost to Mary’s door
With many a grievous groan.
Makes small sections of the text hang together and flow better. Draws our attention to this phrase. Creates a harder or softer mood in line with the meaning (hard consonants are b d k p q t, soft are f h j l m n r s v w y z, while c and g can be either hard or soft)  
Assonance
Vowel sounds are repeated at the beginning or middle of nearby words.
Her early leaf’s a flower
But only so an hour.
There were excited bursts and swerves as the cattle stampeded.
Makes small sections of the text hang together and flow better. Draws our attention to this phrase. Repetition of vowels generally gives a soft, quiet, calm mood unless the sounds are the short vowels, eg in cat, pet, pin, off, cup.
Sound clusters
A group of sounds is repeated throughout a sentence or a group of lines in a poem, not just at the beginnings of words.
Season of mists and mellow fruitfulness…
I love to see the cottage smoke curl upwards through the trees.
These create a “wall of sound” with a number of repeated sounds, not just one type.  They usually create a particular mood by using a number of hard or soft sounds, rather than a combination of the two.
Onomatopoeia
Words sound like the sounds they name.
There came a furious woofing from the seals.
The brrrring of the alarm woke him.
This helps us hear the actual sound being named and therefore we understand it properly or it transports us to the place of the sound.
Repetition
Repeating the same or nearly the same words for effect.
“Come on, Come on!” she shouted.  “We’re late!”
This is used to emphasize whatever is being said or written, or to mimic repetition in nature.
Parallel construction
Using the same word class order twice (in same or two sentences)
Into the valley, through the marsh, rode the hunting pair.
Parallel construction provides rhythm while it expands the detail of the description and creates balance.
Triple construction
Repeating three times a group of words which have the same pattern of word classes.  Each group may or may not start with the same word/s.
…that government of the people, by the people, for the people shall not perish from the face of the earth.
Then leaf subsides to leaf,
So Eden sank to grief,
So dawn goes down to day…
Same as for parallelism, but the triplet provides closure or finality along with that sense of balance.


Language feature
Definition or explanation
Example
Effect
(you must decide on the specific effect relative to the text)
Simile
An image which compares two things using like or as
The black smoke rose like a wizard’s tower spiralling into the sky.
The playground was as empty as a ghost town.
All imagery gives the person/animal/thing being described the characteristics of something else.  It therefore enlivens descriptions by helping us to see these people/animals/things in a new light – in a way we may
Metaphor
An image which compares two things without using like or as
We emerged from the cool dark of the hut into the blast furnace heat of a Central Otago summer afternoon.
The fireworks were sparkling flowers exploding in the night sky.
have never seen them or thought about them before. 
Metaphors are more compact and tighter in their comparative description than similes.
Personification
An image which gives human qualities to non-human things.
The night hung out a multitude of lanterns to guide the travellers.
Raindrops danced on the pavement.
In addition to the above, personification makes inanimate objects seem lively and lifelike while it also contributes to our sense of oneness with these inanimate objects.
Choice of words
(vocabulary)
Using more unusual or specialized or technical words
The wind moaned, a low-pitched, unutterably eerie threnody (sad song). 
He died of a myocardial infarction.
Sometimes, more unusual words provide more specific meaning than common ones.  Specialized or technical words make it seem like the writer/speaker really knows the topic.
Use of slang
Most likely used in direct speech.
“Hey, you guys, let’s cut loose tonight and paint the town red.”
Grounds the text in informality as well as a certain social group and period of time.
Use of direct or indirect speech
Quoting or reporting spoken words.
“Come over here!” Jack yelled, then proceeded to tell us all how he’d won the Melbourne Cup pool in his office.
Makes the character come alive.  We can “hear” the way s/he speaks – the actual vocab, grammar and tones.

Use of incorrect grammar
Generally used in direct speech but may also be used in autobiography for particular effect.
“Let’s have ourselves a few beers.”
“I sure do hate them direct marketers always calling at dinner time.”
Creates an image of the character – helps to define personality and place him/her in a particular educational or social class.  Provides authenticity in your writing.
Pun
Word play involving the use of a word with two different meanings or two words that sound the same but mean different things.
Often used in advertising.
An advert for an omega-3 margarine has this statement: The way to a man’s heart is through his stomach.  This gives new literal meaning to an old figurative phrase which involved romance rather than health.
Provokes amusement and therefore a tendency for the reader to feel good about the company / product and possibly to buy the product.
If used by a character, shows that that character is rather clever and witty.




Language feature
Definition or explanation
Example
Effect
(you must decide on the specific effect relative to the text)
Hyperbole
Deliberate exaggeration
I’ve told you thousands of times to clean up your bedroom.
Used for emphasis to get a point across.  Also illustrates something of the mood of the speaker/writer.
Litotes
Deliberate understatement
“Well, I was sure was brassed off when he walked out on me.”
Shows just how strong the emotion is and illustrates something of the character of the speaker/writer.
Use of multiple adjectives or adverbs
The adjectives give more information about the noun and the adverbs about the verb.
The air was full of driving, needle-pointed ice spicules…
Slowly, stealthily, the wind was lifting a swell.
Builds up a very full picture of the object/animal/person or the activity so that it becomes very clear in the reader’s mind – the reader feels s/he can picture it or see it happening very precisely.
Simple sentences
These have only one complete verb, though there may be one or more incomplete verbs.
Passing the school, we saw the flames pouring out of the office.
Used to establish one idea.  Often used as topic sentences, making clear what the paragraph is about or marking a change of place/topic/etc
Compound sentences
These have a minimum of two complete verbs and each part of the sentence can stand on its own.
We danced all night, then climbed the hill to see the sun rise.
Used to get across two main ideas with some supporting detail.
Complex sentences
These have a minimum of two complete verbs; the part of the sentence which has one of those verbs, but cannot stand on its own, is called a subordinate clause.
We left the party because the level of violence was getting way over the top.
Although the sky was overcast, no snow fell that night.
Used to provide explanations and other more detailed information about the idea expressed in the main clause.
Rhetorical question
A question that does not expect an answer from the reader or audience
So what would result from such a plan?  Chaos, that’s what.
To get the readers’ / audience’s attention and make them think about the answer before giving it.
Use of command
This is the verb used alone (without a noun or pronoun).  Can be used with adverbs or other word classes.
StopCome here and sit down while I talk to you.
To catch people’s attention, whether it’s another character in a narrative or the audience listening to a speaker.  We are socially conditioned to obey commands so the advertiser or speaker may get some affirmative response.
Use of first and second person pronoun
1st person singular = I, me, my, mine, plural = We, us, our, ours
2nd person singular and plural = You, your, yours

Mostly used in
  • autobiography
  • 1st person narrative
  • direct speech
  • oral presentations.
I would like you to think hard about what I’m going to tell you next.
“You wouldn’t dream what happened to him.  I can’t believe it myself!”
I opened the door wide, then opened my eyes wider when I saw a small black dog sitting on the step.
I was born on a grey winter’s day in Dunedin.  My mother tells me that the nurse bathed me in cold water by an  open window so that’s probably why I enjoy the cold southern winters….
First person: Gives immediacy to the text – the author or character makes a direct connection with the reader / audience.  The emotional qualities of the text / character are more available also – the internal life of the author or character.  “We” in a speech involves the audience with the speaker (“We all know that violence is wrong”).

Second person:  In speeches and adverts, this direct address to the listeners/viewers involves them and may challenge them to respond, even if only mentally. In narrative, the use shows interaction between characters. 




Language feature
Definition or explanation
Example
Effect
(you must decide on the specific effect relative to the text)
Symbolism
Use of an object (concrete noun) to represent some emotion or belief system or other abstract noun
Simple symbols are widely accepted, eg. heart / love, dove with an olive branch / peace.  Others are more complex and individual to an author / character, eg. neon lights / urban sophistication
These are a form of shorthand to emotions – an author can use a symbol so that the reader / audience understands the emotions invested in the object without describing those emotions every time the object is used.  Provides the reader with a visual (actual or mental) aide-memoire – something that conjures up certain memories and/or emotions or qualities when s/he sees the symbol.
Euphemism
Use of a less objectionable or harsh expression to avoid upsetting or offending people
His wife passed away (died).
The firm was restructuring (sacking workers).
She is vertically challenged (short).
Amusement in the reader, or revealing of the character of the person using it (kindhearted or sarcastic or squeamish, for example)
Neologism
New word – an invented word
nylon, radar, Thermos
Newness / novelty / difference from “ordinary” words makes it stand out – make the reader/viewer remember them
Listing
Objects/reasons/parts of a whole, etc. are listed – in text, usually with commas separating them; in adverts/web pages or text, can be with bullet points
We give him access to the biomechanics, conditioning, nutrition, physiology and psychology he needs to be the best.
Shows the extent of or emphasizes the topic/object/event being discussed/described; shows the author’s wide knowledge of the topic
Emotive language
Choice of words which have specifically intended emotional effects or are intended to evoke an emotional response in the reader
There was a clammy self-congratulating illiteracy of the heart drooling from every word.

The attitude and emotions of the author are transferred or made clear to the reader
Sarcasm
Unkind humour directed against what the writer / speaker doesn’t like
…fluff-filled catalogues..
(as above – the emotions and attitudes are ones of disdain or contempt or revulsion or dislike or bitterness)
Irony
saying the opposite of what you mean
..cultural icons like McDonald’s carparks..
(as above – the intent and effect are less offensive than in sarcasm, but the author may still feel strongly on the subject)
Contrast
Using word of opposite meaning close together
In a city that never sleeps, she seems to be trying to keep us awake.
The sun warms on a bitterly cold day
Strengthens each aspect of the contrast by showing up the differences
To emphasize a change or difference or idea
Use of numbers / statistics
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Thousands died and hundreds of thousands are homeless
A specific number or statistic gives the impression that the speaker/writer is authoritative and knowledgeable
Use of authority figures
The words (or image) of a famous person or celebrity are used
(Paris Hilton wears only Versace).  (Daniel Carter loves Jockeys).
The reader / viewer aspires to share the goals of (and use the product promoted by) the personality
Allusion
A reference to another work
Wagner’s Ride of the Valkyries plays during Apocalypse Now
“It’ll be just like Coral Island.”
Adds another dimension to the text by introducing material from our external knowledge (if we get the allusion)
Quotation
Direct use of another’s words (spoken or written)
Churchill famously said, “We will fight them on the beaches….”
A quotation will add some of the authority of the original author to the current speaker/writer

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